Friday Fictioneers – October 5, 2012
Picture Perfect
By Scott L Vannatter
October 4, 2012
Gayland looked at the kitchen: globe lighting, shelf of wine bottles, spotless.
Then he looked at the body on the floor: Arms akimbo, blood spattered across her clothing and face, butcher knife protruding from her chest. The entire scene looked like something from a bad movie set. He pulled at his beard and stomped his foot.
“I don’t like the way it looks,” he muttered to all around him. They looked at their shoes hoping it wasn’t their fault.
He grabbed the corpse by the arm and pulled.
“Get up, Sweetheart. Go back to makeup and have them try again.”
Namaste,
Scott
Comments
At first I thought Gayland was a heartless bastard only to find out that he’s demanding director. I suppose those two could be considered the same thing, couldn’t they?
I am certain that the cast of a big blockbuster might have trouble telling the difference!
Hahahaha….awesome story! Loved the detailed setting…
Wonderful! Glad to make you laugh!
Scott
That was seriously cool. Did not expect it to be part of a movie set.
I love to surprise people.
That. Was. Wonderful. I loved the twist at the end! Thank you for sharing this with us!
Here’s mine
http://sarahthestoryteller.wordpress.com
Ha! A huge sigh of relief lol. Very well done! Thanks so much for stopping by mine
You are welcome.
Nothing like a few blood splatters in the kitchen. I think I’ve seen that movie. good one, Scott.
Lol, I can think of several that might fit.
Great story! So realistic in your setup and yet even with your foreshadowing the end was still a surprise.
Coming from you I feel highly praised!
Fooled me, too, Scott! Thanks for commenting in reply to mine
Naughty you, fooling us this way. Good job.
Lol, sometimes you just have to have fun.
Scott
Oh! God! I LOVE this Scott! Hahaha!
So glad you did!
Hi Scott,
Thanks for injecting some humor into my life. Very funny! Ron
Oh, for that you are so welcome.
Scott
Fooled me! Clever piece.
Namaste
Great and unique take on the prompt. A fine play on words too. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/10/05/fridayfictioneers-the-empty-heart/
Fantastic twist.
Thanks so much!
i was going to complain about the cliché “something from a bad movie set” until i realized it wasn’t a simile but reality.
your kitchen is very popular today: on this blog it was set on fire
http://themirthofdespair.wordpress.com/2012/10/04/aflame/
Ha! I thought it was going to be another dark one. Great job.
Mine is here today http://anneorchardwriter.wordpress.com/2012/10/05/friday-fictioneers-if-you-cant-stand-the-heat/
Glad I caught you!
Nicely set up, great twist.
Dear Scott,
Very well done. The perfect depiction of a movie set and the attendant dram behind the scenes.
Aloha,
Doug
Well, that was amusing. I didn’t know Gayland was an actual name; that’s such a weird name.
May not be; I made it up.
Scott
Well, I googled it, and there seem to be a few real people with that name. Lol.
Lol, thanks for saving me the time.
ha ha ha oh man Brilliant
Scott this was so much fun…
Glad it amused you!
okay you got me..lol
lol
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