Friday Fictioneers – 12/14/2012
“Done”
Brother grabs me by my arm.
“You have to see! You have to see!”
I am in a mood, tired of all this crap.
“Yeah, yeah. What am I seeing now?” Another world-changer I imagine. The last one was a time-traveling toaster. The garage wiring was three days being fixed.
“No, no, this time, this time…” He was even more insistent. “The globe, er… ball and laptop…connected by dimensional…”
I am losing patience. Then, the sky darkens and the wind picks up bad.
“What?” I wonder.
Brother’s eyes go wide.
“I, I must’ve…left it on!”
I hear the ear-shattering roar…
Namaste,
Scott
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Well, I’d say they’re in for one heck of an experience. A lot of people are. Very enjoy able. Thanks, Scott.
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Dear Scott,
Napoleon Dynamite’s got nothing on him. Loved this story. namaste and out.
Aloha,
Doug
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Wonderful! Thanks!
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ah, brothers working together, until one of them screws it all up. patience, boy. patience. and never underestimate the younger one. well done.
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Thanks
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I think eerie describes it well. Mad scientist is a great literature invention 🙂
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buawhaha! 🙂
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Brother sounds like a bit of an eccentric. Time travel toaster? Love it. Can’t imagine what this next invention is but I hope they have fire insurance. Fun take on the prompt, Scott.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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🙂
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That was very cool, Scott… maybe he’s a Mayan… I liked how your character called him Brother.
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Lol, it wasn’t meant as a complete compliment, but I liked it, too!
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Hi Scott,
Thanks for your comment on my story. Brother sounds like a whilrling dervish. Very inventive story about inventing things. Ron
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Thanks, brothers who are strange (I am) must be watched (I should be!).
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The present tense in the last line works for me. Great take!
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Thanks.
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This is a wonderful story
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Fun! Thanks.
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Very convincing. And a great take on the prompt.
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Thanks!
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I was very amused by the time-traveling toaster.
Go! Inventive brother, Go!
Small edit: Should that be ‘I heard the ear-shattering roar…’ (Past tense)?
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Tried to keep it all in the present tense, but I will check. Decided that he couldn’t tell us if he heard it if the world was done for.
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Oh. The preceding part of the story is in the past tense.
Maybe a blank line would have separated the past and the present.
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See what you think now.
I think it is all changed to present.
Scott
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Better 🙂
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Good!
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Ah, quite exciting, leaves the imagination on a roll after reading it. 🙂
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Thank you!
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Great! I guess I don’t understand, but I’ve read it 3 times, I must be tired.
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Wonderful story!
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Yep, looks like it worked all right.
Namaste, World … (good story!)
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Thanks!
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Oh oh….guess it worked this time…very well done as always
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lol – yes, worked.
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