Friday Fictioneers – Feb 8, 2013 – Night Flight – Genre: Dark Humor
Night Flight
He watched as yellow went to turn red, the ball dropping toward the horizon. He could still feel the fever; the tingle that said too early to get on the plane.
“Montreal?” the tanned blonde looked over her stylish frames appraising him for future needs. He grinned over his Ray Bans.
“No, getting off while still stateside.”
“Too bad,” she pouted a bit.
“The ‘Mile High’ club isn’t out of the question,” he felt the pull.
Her eyes brightened. “Bloody good!” she exclaimed.
You have no idea, he thought to himself. All kinds of hungers could be taken care of.
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The good thing with vampires on a plane is that you can get a stake through security. 🙂
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lol – never thought of that one.
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this line: “The ‘Mile High’ club isn’t out of the question,” he felt the pull. was this said aloud? i’m not positive. i mean, it’s in quotes, but it seems like more of a thought than actually spoken.
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No, he said it aloud to pull her in.
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well that’s pretty brazen, and i applaud it! i like brazen.
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I wouldn’t have known!
Scott
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yeah, i thought not. ha!
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🙂
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came back to read again. yes the pull is there, and nicely understated indeed.
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🙂
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So cute. Was he a vampire? I had to go back and read for a second time. Such a good job.
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Yes, that was the idea. Thanks.
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Sounds like he’s going to put the bite on the evening. Nice one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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lol
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Wow, you went for the jugular on that one! Thanks, Scott! Nice work.
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Funny!
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Vampires on a plane!
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Oh my! I never thought I would lead to such a film!!!
ARRGGG!
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The vampires are everywhere. Curse Stephanie Meyer and her famous characters. Why can’t weall see such success with our writing?
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Maybe it’s because mine die in the sun, not “glow”.
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Ah, very good, Scott 🙂
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Thank you much.
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Whoa — you’ve told a much longer story here without the need for words. And I do see the vampire note, but what I kept thinking and feeling was that this could work extremely well as a story with a terrorist theme. I see all kinds of possibilities in their words and his “fever.” You’ve done a great job of capturing reader attention.
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Thanks, it’s so good to hear that.
Scott
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The “bloody good” response made me smile
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I liked that when I wrote it.
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I was thinking that her future needs might not be what he thinks she means. Perhaps she’s a vampire, too, or something worse. Who can tell?
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Now, there’s a twist!
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Well done Vamp story. I Like it!
Tom
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Good to hear!
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Oh I like this….very subtle hints yet works well. Mile high club haha…love it
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🙂
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hmp damnit, for some reason i imagined him as some really handsome man.. won’t mind if he bites me.lol very well written, it’s so easy to imagine both the characters..
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Ah, “bitten by love”, huh? Good.
Thanks,
Scott
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All needs catered for. Some airlines think of everything.
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Dear Scott,
One of the more classy vampire stories I’ve read. Good job.
Aloha,
Doug
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He is classy, isn’t he?
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Boy, those vampires sure have it easy! I’ve barely made it into the “Sea Level Club” and I positively absolutely don’t bite. Fun story.
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can i get a seat on that flight?! well done. i’m in!
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Oh, oh… Was it you who had vampires in sunglasses way back when? Either way, creepily done! 🙂
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Not sure about the sunglasses, but not my first vampire story.
Thanks.
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A Vampire!!!
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Yet again! 🙂
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I think the last two sentences bring the story to an intriguing finish. Cryptic and chilly . . .
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🙂
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Oh dear! Superbly understated….the taste of blood on the air..and very nice description of the two of them….!
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Thanks very much!
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