Friday Fictioneers for 3/1/2013
“Just in Time” – Genre: humorous / Sci-Fi
Jeremy was beyond excited. His “new” car was officially his. Sharon would be upset, no doubt. She was all for the new, the 2038, sleeker, hybrid, 325 mpg, top out at 61. She wouldn’t know “priceless” if it bit her.
This car had style. Jeremy hopped in. It even had a key! No retinal scan, thumbprint ID, or form-fitting contour recognition.
He turned the key and shifted. Rattling and whizzing, the engine died. Jeremy was heart-broken. Then, he stared.
“Oh my God!” he screamed when he saw the billboard on the road, neither of which had existed for 20 years!
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Namaste,
Scott
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Spooky. What does he do next? Really enjoyed this.
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Hm, will have to think on it.
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Cool, it’s back to the future!
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Yeah! Car’s worse though.
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Yes this was a unique great take. I could see him cursing trying to drive.
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🙂
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“She wouldn’t know ‘priceless’ if it bit her” was well-played.
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Thanks, the ” ” were suggested by Rich. It was a good call.
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He has quite an adventure coming, I think. I hope this car has some sturdy seat belts.
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An good gas and accelerator! Yes!
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Cool! Love the back in time ending. Although I’m not sure there is a time when that car wouldn’t look out of place. Great story 🙂
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Parts is parts.
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Brilliant! Sci-fi WITH time travel. What fun. You’ve got me thinking perhaps I should start hoarding some future ‘priceless’ items – or maybe not.
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Lol – either way, there’s a story.
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ya know, i had time travel thoughts, but i held back. i’m glad you didn’t. well done.
this line: She wouldn’t know priceless if it bit her. think about either putting “priceless” in quotes or italics, just to signify it a little more. up to you.
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Interesting thought.
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Loved your ending, and the sounds in the car, and the key. Ok, I liked it all. Great job.
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Thank you. I had fun, again.
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What a timely story, Scott. Fun.
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🙂
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This is for you! 🙂 http://yourinnerfeathersbyruby.wordpress.com/2013/02/28/nominated-with-two-awards/
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I read and will post my choices on Monday. I have managed to work a bit ahead so I could take a small break from writing posts.
Scott – Thanks so much!!!
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You are mostly welcome Scott, take your time, no worries! I just gave you the award to show you my appreciation to your blog and how much it inspires me! Enjoy your weekend! 🙂
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It makes me incredibly happy to know that what I write is inspirational to you.
Thanks for making my day!
Scott
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Love it, Scott. You are so talented.
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Well, that means a lot to me. Thanks.
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Haha… nice take on the prompt. ‘Twould be rather disconcerting indeed.
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Glad you liked it.
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Nice take on the prompt – something different.
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Thanks.
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Nice ending.
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Thanks!
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yes! i was waiting for someone to write about a time machine. priceless. great job 🙂
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Glad you liked it; first one I thought of.
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That’s a priceless ending. Now, how does he go back; throw it in reverse?
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That’s a whole other story!
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Oh this is great. He went back in time. Love the originality.
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Torn from the Twilight Zone! Love that kind of stuff!!!
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Bill Boards?
Wait – are you suggesting a future without advertising? Without mind-numbing, ever- intrusive, visually altering marketing? What are you – a socialist science writer?
You car may have a key but your crystal ball is prophetically impaired.
Nice story, though.
I bow to the spirit in you.
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