Photo taken from: http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2013/03/06/8-march-2013/
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“Bye Bye”
“Quit being such a baby!”
“I am not being a baby, Cheril. There’s something there.”
“We are getting a lot to check this place out, so do your job.”
Link climbed the old rickety staircase going up to the “haunted attic.”
He did not like the feelings he had when others had simply told him about this place where a young woman was murdered. He opened the door.
Cheril waited, impatiently, with Jake. Ten minutes later, there was a crash and a bulb shattered at Cheril’s feet.
They looked for hours, but never found anything of Link except his equipment.
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I don’t normally do this, but http://thewritersvillage.wordpress.com/ pointed out something in a comment. So, giving proper credit, I give you number 2:
“Bye Bye” (2) – Humorous
“Quit being such a baby!”
“I am not being a baby, Cheril. There’s something there.”
“We are getting a lot to check this place out, so do your job.”
Link climbed the old rickety staircase going up to the “haunted attic.”
He did not like the feelings he had when others had told him about this place where a woman was murdered. He opened the door.
Cheril and Jake looked desperately for him. A crashing sound put him behind a stack of old suitcases on his back.
“You know what we have?”
“Oh My God! We found the missing link!”
Namaste,
Scott
Comments
Two for the price of one, yet each within the limit. We are easily going to surpass 100 tries this week.
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Very good story, but I had to laugh at the missing link 😉
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That was, of course, from a suggestion in another comment, but, yes, it was funny!
Thanks
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The missing link saved the day. Still laughing.
Aloha,
Doug
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🙂
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haha sooo glad you decided to post the second one as well! i liked both but i look forward to your funny stories too lol
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🙂
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I like the wordplay in the second one. I alwayslike the stories that me me laugh 🙂
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I hope we all like those types of stories.
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Dear Scott,
Glad you added the second Link. I liked both of your spooky story but the second one packed a bigger punch. Love the ending line. Nice job.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Wow, Thanks!
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I’m impressed how many spooky responses this picture’s earned. Obviously a lot of ghosts lurking on this staircase!
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Well…. #1 was an okay horror story, but #2 was a hilarious horror story. I think you need to sneak in the ‘crash’ sound… to create worry. Maybe take out ‘simply’ which puzzled me.
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I will check.
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There, fixed, I think. Yes, I do like it better. Check it out.
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Liked the dual nature of the pieces, each one tracking the other to a point. Nicely done!
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Thanks!
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nicely done
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I actually liked the first one better! The end leaves so many thoughts of what happened. Nice work!
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Thanks! I am glad to hear that, actually, as I, of course, did that one by myself.
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Here, here!
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Sounds haunting to me. I wonder what happen to Link but not enough to hang around.
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I put a second one in later…did you see that one?
Just curious.
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No I didn’t I’ll go back and peek.
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I lie yes I saw the ending the link that does give it a sweet twist. 🙂
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🙂
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Both were good, but the second one made me smile.
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Yes, that’s the way I felt, too.
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Nice tension exploding with the lightbulb – well written!
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Thanks!
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I guess he should have stuck with his instincts. Good dialogue.
janet
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Thanks!
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I guess you could say this was sort of a missing link.
Nice dialogue, quick pacing, and a good story. Enjoyed it.
Randy
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Lol – that would have made a great punch line!!!
And, I missed it….
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I added a second version with proper credit to you. Thanks!
Scott
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I’m glad that you LinkedIn,
so to speak..
😉 Randy
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Me too!
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Nicely captured Scott. It seems the stairs have evoked many a deadly or scary deed.
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🙂
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Excellent as usual, Scott 🙂
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Glad you like it!
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