Five Sentence Fiction – Home
What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.
This week: Home
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FSF-Five Sentence Fiction
By Scott L Vannatter
6/12/13
Home
Jacob had settled on the bus, refusing anything else, using the hours to prepare himself for whatever might come along.
Alicia had never approved of his “service”; she felt he could have served his country at a desk without having to take the life of anyone else; he knew he needed more; they had fought the night he had left and had not spoken much since.
Almost four years was a long time; he missed her but had sent a message last week saying he would be there tonight and would leave if that’s what she wanted; his heart was heavy, but he still believed in what he had done, why he had been there.
The bus stopped in his small town’s station and he stepped down, looking for her, but trying not to; she was there, all three children in tow, tears streaming down her face.
She ran to him, taking him by the only arm he had left and hugged him tightly, her words slowly sinking in as she said, “That little girl you saved from the bomb got to go home, and I am so glad you did, too.”
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Namaste,
Scott
Comments
This is super! It makes you really think about what happened between them and what’s going to happen now. Very nice.
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Thanks. That’s what I hoped for.
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A great story about a wounded warrior. I really enjoyed reading the thought process of this soldier as he puts what he does into perspective without expecting anyone else to understand, but knowing that it is in his bones to continue doing what he thought best for himself and his country.
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I have a feeling a lot of them do just that.
I do that on other things.
Scott
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Beautifully written. Excellent.
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Thank you!
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Sad and touching, still amazes me how you could write in just 5 sentences.
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This was very powerful, as the man did what he was called to do, with no apologies, and very touching as his beloved came to see the necessity of what he had done as well. Very well written.
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Thank you. It felt wonderfully powerful to write.
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Made my heart soar. Happy ending, even with his missing arm. He could still wrap an arm around his wife and children…..
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🙂
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Such a beautiful description of love. Very moving.
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Thank you very much.
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Okay, got chills running down both arms. Great job of taking us through all the emotions!
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You don’t know how happy that makes me to hear that.
I got all teary-eyed when I wrote it and had difficulty reading it again for mistakes.
Scott
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There are quiet, but heroic, homecomings like this all over the world, we just don’t see them. Lovely!
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Thanks!
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sad but beautiful Scott, loved the way story developed
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Thank you. This one honestly made me tear up as I wrote it.
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Sometimes things do work out for the best.
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They always work out for the best for all concerned. I think that, often, we just can’t see that, or aren’t around to see it all fit together. I believe we would be amazed if all the parts were put together in front of us.
Scott
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Nice story. Really love the last line.
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Thanks, it made me so sad to write it.
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That’s how you know it was good!
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I figured that, especially after all the wonderful comments.
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