Five Sentence Fiction – Locked
What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word.
The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.
This week: LOCKED
Read my story, then click on the pic above to go to the list of the rest!!!
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“Uncle Elbert”
By Scott L Vannatter
Uncle Elbert is weird; you need to remember this; I had heard it so often, that I said and thought it without it passing through my conscious mind.
Uncle Elbert lives in a castle-mansion with 237 rooms, 9 of them kitchens, 14 of them bathrooms, and only 1 of them locked; that room became a fixation for me from the time I was 8 years old and up into adulthood; I would dream of what treasures were behind that locked door; I would obsess, if truth be known; I understand that and it explains everything.
Uncle Elbert was the only one who had a key to that lock and that only he had the combination to the door behind the lock and only he had the pass card to the electronic door behind that one; it bothered me more than I care to admit that I hated Uncle Elbert because of that; I learned it early and it tore at me from all directions; I became, oh yes, I already said it: obsessed.
Uncle Elbert did not know that I spent 12 years following him around and sneaking into areas when he was not around to get a copy of that key, to find that combination, and to duplicate the pass card so that I could, finally get into that room and find: a broken dolly, a train set with no tracks, 2 old Christmas trees with mildew, a four-poster bed with a broken frame, and a fork.
Uncle Elbert is weird.
Comments
Very believable story. Uncle Elbert is weird!
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Lol.. I was expecting at least a sex slave…. xxx
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Hmm, interesting side story!
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Yeah, well just stay the heck out of my private room from now on!
Oh, and nice story!
(But seriously, stay out of the room…)
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🙂
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I like it how you build up the suspense and how you started and finished with the same sentence.
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Brilliant.
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I really like this! Great story indeed!
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Well, enough like it that I am very glad I wrote it.
Thank you.
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I like this little story a lot. Well done!
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Thank you…It was great fun!
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Oh all the trouble for this!! 😆
Uncle Elbert is weird
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lol
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