Time for Five Sentence Fiction, hosted by Lillie McFerrin. This week’s word prompt is HIGHWAY. A five sentence story (in my case, episode) is the goal. After reading my short serial (and, perhaps, the other two episodes) please continue on to the other entries > HERE < . Enjoy!!
Queen of the Road
By Scott L Vannatter
11/5/2013
Carolyn did a combination of walking and dragging her tired self down the stretch of highway that used to be full of traffic, but now would allow a person to sleep on the middle line if desired.
She shifted the holster on her hip so the berretta was snugger and did not chaff so badly when she walked; not wearing the gun would be a ludicrous idea.
A slight movement and short noise caused her long-term rhythm to break and the hunting knife slung across her chest flew from its sheath to her hand and she turned to face the danger.
The feral man staggered relatively slowly across the grassy edge of the forest and headed toward her with a jagged step and no soul shining in his eyes.
Carolyn stepped toward the creature and, when close enough, silently moved to the side and brought her blade to bear down hard on its throat, burying the hilt upwards through the brain, before pulling it out and returning quietly to her tired rhythm on the pavement toward the setting sun.
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Episode 1: The Restaurant at the End
Episode 2: Keeping Watch
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Namaste,
Scott
Comments
I like the line “No soul shining in his eyes”—adds to the eerie, resigned mood of the piece. Great job 🙂
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Thanks, I hope you will read on Tuesday-Wed when I start the long version of the story.
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Egads Scott. If I didn’t know any whether it sounds as if the setting of your endeavor this has to deal with the topic of the Apocalypse. If this is the case, you’ve been quite successful in achieving it, albeit you’ve got to read between the lines to see it.
I’ve given you have comment … now give me yours. 🙂 🙂 🙂
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Yes, this is to be an apocalypse story. There are 3 short parts in my prompts from this week.
I also am beginning the full rewrite and part one is scheduled for next Tuesday at 10pm through Wed.
It should be about 5000 words and take three weeks.
Scott
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Hi Scott – It seems as if I’ve done it again … reading through your five sentences and seeing the true story which hides within them.
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Good talent. I hope you get to read the longer version I started Tuesday night on my blog.
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You see, this is why us men never stop to ask for directions – there’s always someone trying to shove a knife in our brains…
Nice story, but now I want to know how she got there and where she’s going!
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I am working on a long version of the short story and plan to post it over 3-4 posts in the near future.
Glad you are liking it.
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I like the feeling that there’s no fear in her. She’s just doing what has to be done.
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Glad you see that. It, of course, means that she may have been afraid initially, but now…
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She feels so tired, so resolved. I would like to know where she goes.
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