Today’s prompt is below for Flash Friday. The Dragon’s bidding word to be included is Hope. Flash Friday is a collection of stories all 140-160 words and is hosted by the fabulous Rebekah Postupak. After you read my selection below, click > HERE < for the rest. Enjoy!
Young Star. Photo by NASA’s Spitzer Space Telescope.
Thinking Outside the Box
A Carolyn Adventure
By Scott L Vannatter – 158 Words
@SVBookman
Leaving the snowman behind her, Carolyn headed toward the closest house she could see. It was across a snowy field with bits of cornstalks sticking up in long rows.
“Harvesting must’ve been done early here,” she thought while the loud crunching of her shoes left a clear trail in the, otherwise, clean inch or two of the new-fallen precipitation.
Her mind, for some reason, kept going back to her high school days in Science class. She remembered watching the movies and digital programs on the stellar bodies. One in particular, was a huge cloudy mass with a star at the center. She could not remember the name, but the idea of there being all that and more out there always filled her with hope, especially now.
She reached the house and crept toward the door. A snapping twig brought her around, knife in hand. The little boy looked at her with wide eyes.
“Y-You lost, Lady?” he stammered.
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Namaste,
Scott
Comments
Fun to see it continued… one piece of editorial thought: the loud crunching of her shoes, would not leave a clear trail in the snow. You need to separate the sound from the movement. Small details like that take me out of the story, when I edit… or read for pleasure. The suspense continues nicely.
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Thank you. I will look at that, if I use it in the longer version.
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That is a little chilling 🙂
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It is, isn’t it?
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What’s next??? A knife, really? She’s a stranger at her own house. Love the creepiness!
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Oh, it’s not her house…she just wanted to stay there a bit.
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Ohhhhhhhh!
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🙂
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