Rochelle Wisoff-Fields brings us Friday Fictioneers – 100 words (+/-) to make a complete story based on the prompt.
After reading mine below, please click > HERE < for the rest. Enjoy!!!
Early Morning Blessing
By Scott L Vannatter – 100 words
Nell looked out across the early-morning field rich in color yet vision-strained by wisps of fog. She had not slept the night past, instead fidgeting and worrying lest God decide to halt the day’s progress and the morning not arrive. Up at first light, Nell ran through the dew, dampening her day dress and allowing the early temperature to chill her feet and legs.
She cared not; she stared holes into the mist, searching for movement. When she spied it far down the path, her mind told her to be certain. Yes, a horse and that striped hat! Josiah comes!
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Namaste,
Scott
Comments
Dear Kindred Spirit – Very nice story, soothing. Well written too! Nan 🙂
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Thank you, Nan. That means a lot to me.
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Dear Scott,
Lovely atmospheric period piece.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Scott, The story had the right words to take us back to the 19th Century. It sounds like a male member of her family is returning after a long absence. It must have been hard for a woman alone in those days. Well written. 🙂 —Susan
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I had intended it to be her true love, but I see where your assessment is equally as valid.
Thank you.
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Nell was so waiting for the morning. And the way she stared through the mist was excellent. Clever and well told. Lucy
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Thank you, Lucy! I will have to check out your blog very soon.
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Ah, a little historical fiction – period piece, very evocative of the early morning mist as it lifts and the longing in little Nell.
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🙂
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Although Scott could see the fields and dress, I FELT the cold dew on my legs. Well written
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Thanks you. Something a bit new for me.
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No Godot? .. hey.. I guess the fog added to the anticipation
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🙂
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A lovely historical piece. Great use of language to take us back in time.
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Thank you!
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Your language sounded very much like the time I think you were portraying, Scott, and the images were very vivid. I’m not thrilled with “vision-strained”, although I understand what you’re trying to convey. “Vision hindered/blurred/impaired/?” would make more sense to me.
janet
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Yes, part of it was the hyphened word kept me to 100. That’s something I work hard to do, but, yes, perhaps I could have found a better word. Thanks.
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It was a nice read 🙂 I loved your descriptions 🙂
Swathi Shenoy
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🙂 Thank you!!!
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I enjoyed that and a great interpretation of some of the features of the image.
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Thank you much!
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Amish people? It had that sort of Amish feel, that’s what it brought to mind for me.
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I had an 18th century feel in mind, but, certainly, Amish could work. Thanks for the suggestion.
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Anticipation writ large. I love the descriptions of the fields and her dress. I felt like I was watching it. Great story!
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Oh, I am so visual! It is a great compliment to know you could “see” it.
Scott
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A great display of anticipation. I like that she was up the night before shows the anxiety as well. Good job.
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It’s easier if you have done that; I have.
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