Five Sentence Fiction – Falling – “Free Falling” PG13

Lillie gives us Five Sentence Fiction – Mine is after the prompt and the rest are > HERE < Enjoy!!!

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Falling

“Free Falling”

By Scott L Vannatter – October 17, 2014

It had been a horrible drop from the lookout spot and Gerand had screamed when he tripped on that small stone by the railing.

Now, it seemed, something else was amiss, as he had been falling for several minutes and had not yet hit the ground.

He thought that his poor heart would not last to the end, but that did not seem to be the case as he continued to tumble, first end-over-end  then, learning how to straighten, feet first for hours.

Now, it had been days and he was actually becoming quite bored with the entire manner and wished to all who might listen (and those who wouldn’t) that he would strike and be done with the entire mess.

Cheryl watched as her husband lay in the coma for the second week and was happy that, at least, he was unaware of what the short fall had done to him.

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Namaste,

Scott

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  • Leona H - Shadow Strokes  On October 20, 2014 at 2:37 pm

    I came to visit from Friday Fictioneers and landed here…. may I just say, “wow”. I loved it.

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  • hmchargue  On October 17, 2014 at 3:23 pm

    I loved the surprise. Great idea…the endless fall.

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  • The Writer's Village  On October 17, 2014 at 7:47 am

    It was a wonderful trip as a reader At first I felt, Oh, I’ve read this before. Then i thought, OK, where is this going?
    Then I looked to see if you had stuck to five sentences as I was involved in the falling for almost as long as your character. The description of falling as boredom was great as was the wish to have it end already – only to learn the twist at the end. And that twist raised up even more emotions and realizations, and thoughts about life and death.

    Pretty darn good for 5 sentences – I fell for it completely as you can see. Randy

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  • wildbilbo  On October 17, 2014 at 7:10 am

    Nice – I’ll admit I didn’t expect that ending 🙂

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