Friday Fictioneers Entry for the Week.
copyright – Bjorn Rudberg
Jonathon walked slowly up the pass. He came to a bend and saw the sign.
“Why would I put my hand out like that?” He smiled and kept walking.
Upon coming round the bend, he saw the old man with the shotgun pointing at his head.
His hand went up, exactly like the sign.
The gun blast echoed around the mountains.
The old codger spit green onto the dirt path and grumbled mightily.
“Dern feriners cant foller signs even wit a drawin.”
He sighed, rolled the body off the mountain and sat back on the gold waiting for his brother.
Word Count: 100 words
Namaste,
Scott
This was my first official one of the week. If you want to see my favorite (written too late) –> Here
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Ha! Your story made me really look at the sign. That’s pretty much the interpretation. Hehe. Love the story.
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So glad you did. I had fun writing it.
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Can’t say he didn’t warn ‘im. 😉
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So true.
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I hope the brother shows up soon. Ya never know when one might try going over a mountain road.
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True
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Oh I just love this…. how difficult can it be to follow a simple sign?
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The things I have seen as a teacher of students…
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Wonderful story. Great dialogue.
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I had much fun with it!
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Maybe he should change the sign 😀 Enjoyed this take
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There’s a thought and an alternate ending.
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These dern feriners I tell you…
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🙂
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Yeah, but you don’t learn if you’re dead. . .
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But, could you? hm…
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He did try to warn ’em…. dern feriners…
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🙂
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Dear Scott,
Dern feriners indeed. That’ll learn em proper. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Nothing like dead-end learning.
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Dern feriners after his gold! Well told.
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Thanks. Loved writing it.
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I liked that bit about the hand like the sign. I couldn’t help but imagine that scenario.
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Thank you, Sandra.
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“His hand went up, exactly like the sign” That single sentence lifts this above the ordinary. Well done!
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Thank you, always love hearing that.
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Oh, those country folk – not to be messed with 🙂
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Many of my relatives are, or were, those country folk, at least, a little..
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Bang! Nice one
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I thank you very much.
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Brutal and funny. Nice one.
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Thank you!
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Loved the gol’ dern accent on that thar feller. 😉 Enjoyed this.
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So glad to hear that.
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