These are early entries in Madison Wood’s Friday Fictioneers’ essay prompts. Comments are entered after the last entry before the already done comments.
I have changed the format so that new entries are separate posts in my blog. The last entry on this page was for 9/7/2012. Thanks.
Scott
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Start of a Day
By Scott L Vannatter
September 6, 2012
He took her hand and walked carefully over the rocky terrain. She giggled at him when he almost fell into the nearly non-existent stream. The old, rusty wheel didn’t turn much anymore, but its need to be there wasn’t functional. For that matter, neither was theirs. She sang to herself, almost a hum. He smiled, kissed her and began exploring a bit. The rocky terrain was hard on their feet; they hardly noticed.
“It’s good to be back where we first met,” she smiled coyly, loving the touches he gave.
“Yes, what’s it been? Almost sixty years now?” He sighed.
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Ordinary Day
By Scott L Vannatter
August 30, 2012
He lay quietly on the patio looking out toward the clouds. They swirled slowly, shifting patterns constantly in the upper breeze.
His mind saw the whirlwind in the fluffy off-white mass that foretold the alien invasion. He watched as the clouds parted, ripping cleanly, and the dull colored metal, elliptical ships floated down one by one. Their number must have been in the dozens. He realized this was, most likely, happening all over the world.
It was here! Life was over!
“Joel, come in. Dinner.”
He blinked, looked at the quiet cloud cover, got up, and went in for dinner.
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Approaching Battle
By Scott L Vannatter – August 24, 2012
He sat still on the hillside watching the fog lift as morning approached. His muscles rippled, a move to show off for the ladies and discourage others. He stretched to show his lack of fear at it all. Eight times his world had been invaded; and eight times he had turned the invaders away. He was the champion, sole heir to all around. Yet, he knew he was about to be threatened again. This time, they would not fight fair, would not adhere to the rules. This time it would be ruthless and deadly. This time they would be human.
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Talk of the Trees
By Scott L Vannatter
Aug 16, 2012
The mighty elm looked happily around the forest. The maple was shaking its leaves, whistling. The other elms were standing tall.
The oak seemed to be the only tree unpleased; he looked lost in thought.
“What’s the matter, brother?” He queried.
The older tree looked up and tipped a branch toward his main fork. In it was deeply embedded the skull of a cow.
“It made me realize we are descended from bovines,” he bellowed.
The elm shouted out in disgust.
“Why? We look nothing like them.”
“True,” the old tree began, “but if you go back to our roots…”
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Bomb Shells
By Scott L Vannatter – Thursday August 9, 2012
“That’s not true,” little Tommy sputtered.
“Yes, it is,” retorted Marvin. He was three years older and let Tommy know it.
“The shells look like clams, but they come from space. When they hit the atmosphere there’s a chemical reaction and they become just like shells. But, they have little aliens in them. When enough fall into the sea and they come out, there will be an invasion.” He was smug.
“I don’t believe it,” Tommy continued to argue as they walked away from the beach.
If Marvin had known just how right his information was, he would be worried.
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One for the Money
By Scott L Vannatter – 8/2/2012
The small, dirty boy dragged the college student by the hand.
“Come on,” he urged.
They came to a small, open spot in the woods. The urchin pointed a chubby finger at the mass on the sticks. The student was fascinated. The growth, if that is what it was, didn’t move. It appeared to drip and ooze, but nothing ran off.
His finger reached forth. The mass, with a gravity all its own, pulled him just a bit too slowly into itself. Then, all was quiet. The others young denizens came out from hiding.
“Do it again,” they all chimed.
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Faucet/Tap
By Scott L Vannatter
Geohn’s hand shook as he held the small tin cup beneath the faucet’s mouth. With the other, even shakier, hand, he turned the tap handle. It creaked dryly with a deep groan. He could almost hear the contents of the barrel move as the precious liquid trickled into the cup. He quickly drained the container in his hand, using his tongue to get the misty remnants. His parched throat screamed for more. His gritty eyes then went to the body lying next to the small barrel.
“Never should have tried to take it,” he said, to no one in particular.
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Comments
Well done!!!
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Thanks good to hear from you again. Lost your email then.
Scott
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Not to complain but I’m puzzled about this comment section. At first, I didn’t leave comments because I could not locate it…then when I did…it took 20 minutes of scrolling. Anyone else puzzled about this? Back to your “cottage, hut” story. Charming with a sweet ending. Not sure after 60 years how they managed that rocky terrain. Did they use canes and/or walkers? PS: Love your cute, stuffed mascot also.
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The comment problem will be fixed next Friday. I was using a page instead of a post. I set it all up last night, so, next week each week’s story will be in a separate post. Thanks for you patience.
Scott
PS- I love Hugsey also
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I enjoyed your post for 7/9 – very sweet.
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Aw, sweet! Love that they are so in love, still – and wanting to revisit that life-changing day sixty years before.
Our two tales are here: http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/two-tales-the-old-mine
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Start of the Day was a sweet story. I only wish you’d reconstruct your blog in a way that doesn’t make the commentator have to plod through the whole list. It’s almost a deterrent. I’m 23 on the list.
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I will work on that.
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This is a really beautiful story..
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Nicely done. I wasn’t expecting the end at all.
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I love surprises.
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So sweet. That every couple could survive to a ripe old age 🙂
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🙂
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this one is very nice, really liked it.
the kindredspirit reminds me of the anne of green gables stories which I recall fondly from reading them with my girls.
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I may yet read those. I wanted to…once upon a time.
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as I man I would never have read them if not for my girls, but they were fine books.
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Lovely story. Perfectly told, and a perfect ending as well.
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Thank you! I enjoyed writing it.
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Loved your story this week… beautiful…especially considering how long they have been together
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The older I get, the less long that sounds!
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Start of a Day is a feel good piece. I started out giggling over teen love and ended up going “aw.w.w.” Well done!
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Perfect reaction! Exactly what I was shooting for.
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A lovely picture of love that has endured and is still strong.
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Thank you for getting it all.
Scott
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I like the boy’s fantasy element of this – perhaps he’ll grow up to be a writer.
I’m over here – http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/08/31/friday-fiction-white-pegasi/
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A fine take on the prompt. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/08/31/friday-fictioneers-harmattan-rain/
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Really love Ordinary Day. I predict the boy will one day write sci-fi. I loved it that it was in his head and not really happening. imaginative story.
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I have done things like that when I was younger. It only seemed proper to write about it. Thanks.
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Nice one.
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Appreciate it! Thanks for stopping by!
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I like your mix of reality and imagination.
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Thank!
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Interesting take on the fog picture – it definitely looks like a battle’s on the way. I wonder how your character will fight back – muscles are rarely enough against human invaders!
I’m over here; http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/08/24/friday-fictioneers-far-afield/
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Hmm. I doubt he has thought of that!
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nice, humans do fight dirty.. I suppose that is why sports and ritual have value, fighting then has rules.
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The problem as the Panther saw it (or whatever you pictured) was the human don’t play by the rules if they can get away with not. Hence, all our problems requiring referees and umpires and replays.
Lol
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and drug tests ( smile ) thanks for a good take. Channeling the inner Kipling ?
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Yeah, maybe, just a little. 🙂
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Loved the latest one and loved the ending too – Human’s eh! You’ve got to love them … or not!
Here’s mine too: http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/08/24/friday-fictioneers-misty/
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Excellent. … this time, they’ll be human. Indeed.
Come review mine: http://niftitalks.com/2012/08/23/misty-eyes/
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Approaching Battle…quite a piece. Good job.
http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2012/08/22/escape/
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On “Approaching Battle”…I thought of a mountain lion or something similar from the start. Guess it comes of having been in the mountains for vacation. Very nice! I can just him getting ready.
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Thank you! Had a panther in my head, but your picture is just as vivid and true.
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A panther certainly qualifies as something similar. You accomplished what you hoped to convey!
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🙂
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Definitely a different take on the prompt – I liked it! Also an interesting tree evolution theory 🙂 well done!
Brian (http://pinionpost.com/2012/08/17/the-hatchery/)
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Thank you. I also stopped by your site and left a comment.
Hope to see you again on here soon,
Scott
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This is a unique and most creative take on the prompt; tress talking to each other. A good one. Mine is here and linked: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/08/17/fridayfictioneers-the-withered-flower/
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Thank you very much. I enjoyed your poem. It was a nice start to the morning.
Scott
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I enjoyed your take on the prompt.
Great image of the trees chatting to one another.
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Thanks
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Very original takes…”talk of the trees” reminds me of the Lord of the rings…very well done. mine is here if and when you get a chance
http://boomiebol.wordpress.com/2012/08/16/chidinma-friday-fictioneers-817/
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Grooaaan! I think this will be one of the more unusal takes on the prompt this week. Full marks for originality.
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That’s what I was going for!
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Ah, another take on what that thing was wedged in the fork. A skull huh? I love the idea of trees speculating on their evolution!
cheers,
Lorelei
http://westcoastwriters.blogspot.com/2012/08/fridayfictioneers-fork.html
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Thank you!
Scott
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“Go back to our roots”…trees? 🙂 Are these related to Tolkien’s ents?
Just a punctuation thing–you don’t need a comma after “elm” in the third to the last sentence.
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Hmm, I don’t know which makes me more upset: the fact that I didn’t catch such a simple error (I am so very tired, still…) or the spell check didn’t either!
Scott
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I enjoyed your story.
These aliens are everywhere – I’m with Marvin on the one.
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Yep. I wouldn’t be a bit surprised (well, maybe a little).
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Nice take on the story, I haven’t read another alien angle one yet 🙂
http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/08/10/friday-fictioneers-shell-seeker/
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Thanks very much!
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You’re welcome
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I was unable to find a place to comment on your latest story so am putting it here. I liked it a lot. It seemed very real – and then there was the ending…
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Oh thank you! Of course, that is what I want to hear.
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For a college student, he (or she) wasn’t too smart. If the ooze sucked him in slowly, wouldn’t he try to get away?
Regardless, creepy. Especially with the urchins chanting for more
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I saw it as a “can’t get away, but dying slowly” type of thing, but, obviously, that didn’t come across well, did it?
Thanks,
Scott
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I liked the ominous mood you created here – not sure what the denizens are, but I don’t think i’d want to meet them. I think your characters could do with names, or at least the character you want us to identify with. “The small, dirty boy dragged the college student…” sounds like an exercise and I don’t end up caring about either of them. I don’t even know the student’s gender, whereas “small, dirty boy dragged Alice…” would immediately draw me in more. Just a suggestion though, the piece gets stronger and stronger as it goes on.
I’m over here: http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/08/03/friday-fiction-torment/
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Well thought-out criticism. I will try to remember that. I had thought that anonymity might be more mysterious; that made not have been true.
Scott
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Oh very spooky. Yet with a ring of innocence.
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Thanks, even better than I had hoped.
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I agree with Doug’s comments on your latest story. Quite a twist.
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My links on Madison’s site.
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Nice strange attractor mass. I found myself repelled and attracted just by the photo, so this feeling made sense and you did it very well.
Lorelei
http://www.westcoastwriters.blogspot.com/2012/08/silent-scream-friday-fictioneers.html
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Thanks! It’s what I was trying for.
Scott
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Can’t find a way to comment separately but it doesn’t matter as long as you read this. Your story of the mass, with “its own gravity..” was excellent and macabre. Word choice, pacing, mood; each chosen, crafted and built perfectly. Really enjoyed your short tale.
Aloha,
Doug
http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/08/02/mcmurdo-countdown-objects-in-mirror/
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Thank you so much. You said, pretty much, just what I had hoped to accomplish in the story.
I will stop by your site soon.
Scott
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Dear Scott,
A very well written story which captured, more so than most, the human condition when we find ourselves placed under extreme stress. Great ending and choice of words throughout.
Aloha,
Doug
http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/07/27/waiting-on-a-moment/
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Thank you very much. I appreciate both the compliment and the observations.
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Opps…forgot to share my link:
http://ebooksscifi.wordpress.com/2012/07/27/kingdom-come-by-ilyan-kei-lavanway-for-madison-woods-friday-fictioneers-100-word-flash-fiction/
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I like the smooth twist at the end. It sinks in with a delayed impact that makes it almost surreal.
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Ohh, I like being “almost surreal.”
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Eerily prophetical I think…with the way the world is going, this fight for something as simple as water might come to pass.
Nice job
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I imagine it may already in a few places. Thanks.
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I wonder if he was talking about the man on the floor or himself. Either way well done.
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I intended it to be him talking to man on the floor, but interpretation is the name of the game.
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Good to the last drop…so they say.
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Very funny! I like that.
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The things people will do for water! Nice one.
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Thanks! Yes, anything that becomes of value.
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captured the desperation…. nice
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thank you.
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I worried at first that the water might be tainted since the body was beside the barrel, but it sounds like the narrator might have had something to do with that.
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Oh yes! Never thought about the other. lol
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I need a glass of cold water after reading this. Sad ending. Good description.
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Thanks!
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Oh wow!
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I love the comment!
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You chose good words to convey the dryness and wanting of more water.
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Thanks! I try.
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You did more than try–you succeeded!
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